Gispert
02-29-2008, 12:28 AM
This is my retake on MMPR. I have made plenty of changes, and they will all be showed in the first episode, which is almost done. I have the first chapter here and the second is almost done. Please give me feedback, good or bad let me know. This is an adult take and the teens are out of high school when this starts.
Episode 1
"The Bigining"
Chapter 1
"Evil Comes"
Sarah looked up from her bed as the call came in like an alarm clock. While Sarah never had trouble getting up, in fact she hated to sleep as she felt it was a waste of time, but after the hell she had gone through in the last three days she needed to sleep. It was just three days ago that the U.N. scientific commity had sent yet another 50 researchers along with 20 civilians that were familly members of the researchers. to the newly established moon mining facility. Not to mention just yesterday she had to calm down the minners that think there is moon men after they found some tunnels that looked "man" made. She knew better then to beleive such a thing, after all Humans have been comeing to the moon for years and they were the first and only living thing to ever reach the moon.
"That damn phone is still going off" Sarah thought as the phone continued to ring for what seemed to go on forever.
"Hello.." Sarah answered.
"Ms. Stevens, we have something you might want to see. We've managed to keep it away from the mainstream population, and so far the only ones who know are you me and just a few senier minors, but they have agreed to keep quite." the female voice on the other end calmly stated.
"What the hell are you talking about?" Sarah asked, with a bit of confusion and fear in her vioce.
"It's best if you just see, please Madam, I know you're needing a break, but this is of the upmost importance." The voice pleaded.
"Fine, let me get dressed and I'll be right there. This had better be good." Sarah angerly added. While she was angery, she aments she is kinna courious what this emergency is. What ever it is it had better Earth, or Moon shattering or someone was going to pay.
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While waiting on Sarah, Tiffiny, the voice from the call, noticed that Frank and Justin, the two senier miners that discovered the mysterious object that should not have been there. Sitting on the table right in front of here was just a small metal container right in front of her. Just over two foot tall and just a foot wide, this cylender object looked nothing out of the ordinery, if this from Earth, but they found it in one of the "man" made caverns. There seemed to be no buttons of handles anywhere on it, and for that matter there seemed to be no way to open it, but for some reason she felt in her mind that this was a container.
"What yous think it is mame?" Justin stammered in a horrable southeren accent giving away his hertage from southern America.
"I have no idea, but from the looks of it some kind of container, look like any thing you've seen Frank?" Tiffiny asked.
"I dunno it looks kinna like a dumster or something like it." Frank declaired, but he was oviouly confused.
"Wha, no it looks nothing like that, forget I asked. I wounder what its for?" Tiffiny was both scared and confused as to what this object could be. She had always believed that there was life outthere, but here on the moon. Though it might be proff that there is life outside Earth, it doesn't mean there was life on the moon, or does it? Where the hell is Sarah, we need her here now.
Gispert
02-29-2008, 12:29 AM
Sarah looked into the mirrior, as she always did before she left her little peace of heaven as she called it. She is a tall and slender build woman in her late 20's. She had long black hair that she kept up with every day as she brushed it many times on her free time, which had been lacking as of late. Her skin was a pale white as she hadn't been near any form of a tanning bed in almost a year since she took her post here on the moon base. She always wears nice clothes, and she made sure she packed plenty fro the trip.
As she walked out the door to her quarters she see Conrad rounding the courner of the hall way, looking as if he was being left out.
"Madame, where do you think this mystery is?" Conrad asked more as a statment that he knew what was going on, then a question.
"How did.. ah I see your skills of gathering intell. are not waisted her on this hunk of rock." Sarah said.
"Nothing is ever wasted if you know how to ue them," Conrad declaired cryptialy. Conrad was a tall black man with a bald head. He always wore a black suit that looked the same as it did everyother day. Its always hard to notice how his body looked as his suit always covered it up, which left a lot to iminagation.Being the cheif of security on this station left him with a lot of responabilities, but non of them seem to get him down, as he seemed to enjoy the job greatly. Nothing gets past this guy, not even this "something" that Sarah just heard about. This reminded her that she would have to search of bug yet again, this time if she found any Conrad was out of here.
"Please allow me to escort you to the lab, Madame. I have no doubt that you will need some security this late at nite, being a full moon and all." Conrad added with a hit of humor in his vioce.
"Its always a full moon around here and its around 7 AM American time, I doubt the thugs will be out that thick tonight." Sarah through back at Conrad ovious not taking any humor in this.
"Please, you can never be to carefull around here, after all its a long way from home, and besides I heard the commute is a bitch," Conrad added.
"I can see your not backing down tonight. Fine I might as well take you with me, if nothing else to shut your mouth, assuming you've not mentioned this to anyone else, right?" Sarah said.
"Of course not Madam, and I think you for the safty of this station I needed to go," Conrad said trying to be both charasmatic and professionial at the same time. With this the both made their way to the lab trying to find out what was going on.
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As Sarah and Conrad walked into the lab they saw Tiffiny, Justin, and Frank standing around a metal object trying to find a way to open it. The object looked like a container of some kind, something Sarah could not but her finger on.As usual Tiffiny was to busy studing something to pay any attention when someone entered the lab, of course this time Sarah understood her courisity. Sarah always though Tiffiny was a beuitiful woman for being a scientist. Her shoulder lenght blonde hair was surprisingly well kept, and she never wore glasses. Like most scientiest she didn't wear much makeup, nor did she always wear the latest fashion, but she was not sloppy either. Tiffiny, like Sarah, was often shown the attention of many of the males in the Moon Station, which they both enjoyed quite often.
Standing behind Tiffiny is Justin, one of the two senier minors that discovered this object. Sarah didn't really know much about Justin other then the fact that he had been here longer then her and he had a crush on Tiffiny. Sarah was not sure if Tiffiny knew about that or not as she never really socilized with either one of them, but it was pretty clear to her just by the way he looked at her, and for some reason always found away to help out in the lab. Justin wasn't bad looking though, as he was a tall person and was kinna fit, but he was not much to look at either. His hair was for now short, but often he lets it grow long and rarely keeps it up. The same could be said about his facial hair as well, though when he did keep everything up he did look kinna hot to Sarah.
Sitting on a chair not to far from Justin was Frank, the other miner. He was a short and fat man who looked as if he was going to kill over from a heart attack at any moment. He is a pervert and has been caught many times by Conrad looking at porn on company time, but for some reason Sarah could not force herself to fire Frank. Despite his creepy manor, he seemed to have a heart that was usually overlooked due to his looks and his "uncivilized" actions. He always got his work done, though not always right on time his work was good, well as good as a miner could do.
"What is that thing Tif?" Conrad asked.
"Wha..sorry I had no idea you were there. Madam Stevens I see you're here. Back on topic then,right? I have no idea, but I'm sure I can figure it out. Ever see anything like it?" Tiffiny staggered out oviously startled by Conrad, and excited to share this "discovery" with someone who had some I.Q.
"Hi Madame, Me and Ol' Frank over there found this thing in those man-made tunnels down by shaft 32. It seems to be heavy and I think I hear something in it. Frank says it looks like a Dumpster, but I think he's drunk again." Justin ranted on, as he looked at both Sarah and Frank.
"I'm sure his being drunk has no bering right now. Tiffiny, what do you know about this thing?" Sarah asked.
"Well, I have determined that it is made of a metal that I have never seen. It does apear to be constucted, but by what I have no idea. Also, scanings have shown that it is hallow and that there is something inside as Justin has just said." Tiffiny said.
"So its, alien?" Conrad added.
"Well, I should say so, unless theis two made it as a joke," Tiffiny joked looking back at the two miners.
"We didn't make it, we sware," both Justin and Frank said at the same time.
Justin added, "If I had done it it would have been bigger, and I would know what is inside it".
"I'm sure you two are innicent, but still who made it Tiffiny?" Sarah interupted trying to get to the bottom of this mystery.
"I think after some time I will..." Tiffiny started, but just as she started Justin bagain. "I bet what's ever inside has some clues on it. Maybe if we break it open we can see whats inside and find out." Tiffiny looked at Justin almost with a sudden shock he accully had a good idea, though she was courious how he planned to do this. Then only issue was what if they hit the object inside the container. It could be explosive if hit by a laser, and she knows the metal is far to strong to for a metal drill.
"What if you hit the object inside the container?" Tiffiny asked. With that Justin looked at Frank and whispered something in his ear. As soon as Justin said something to Frank, Frank walked over to Sarah and asked if he could be accused for a moment, he has to use the bathroom. Sarah waved him on.
"Everyone could you guys do me a small favor? Don't tell Frank what I'm about to say, its a miner thing, understand?" Justin pleded.
"What?" Tiffiny questioned. "What's going on?"
"Look I don't want Frank and the other miners know I'm smart. Last time we had a miner show his brains he was laughed back to Earth, remember Earl right. He didn't last more then a week after he started to help in the lab as a tech." Justin proclaimed.
"He speaks the truth, but there was more to Earl's depature then his mental anguish." Conrad added.
"Then go and make sure you get Frank's take on this for security purposes. I want this to be done as soon as we can, I will not lie to you all I'm couries as hell about what this thing is. I'll call you when we feel its safe to bring him back in. Tell him its all prodical, and Justin will be done after his." Sarah took command.
"Yes, Madame," Conrad honered her as he walked tword where Frank walked in hopes of catching him before he tred to come back.
"Tiffiny, Justin, I want this thing opened as soon as posibale,"Sarah delcared as she sat down and watched them get to work. It kinna made Sarah proud to see Justin acting his IQ for a change. She had read over many of the files of the current staff seniors when she first took command over the station. Like all workers that comes to the station they have to go through several test both mental and physicial. Justin scored high on his IQ test, though he never applied any of it. With luck he might one day accept a promation to work in the lab, he's still young and he could do the job if he applied himself to his studies.
From the looks of things Justin and Tiffiny were setting up the container into the x-ray machine to pinpoint the dimentions of the object inside the container. From the looks of things Justin was going to try to angle the object to one side and hope for the best that the object inside would not be effected by the increase of tempature of the laser pentrating the container.
"What the hell, the dimentions have changed each time we measure whats the object inside this thing, you sure you know what your doing?" Tiffiny asked Justin getting frustrated with the tests on this thing.
"It must be the metal, I bet its messing with the results. I bet we could still drill a small hole in the container so we could get a cameria in there to see whats inside. I know how to drill, I'm something of a expert at that," Justin said with a smile on his face.
Gispert
02-29-2008, 12:30 AM
Tiffiny ovisiouly taking the joke in Justin's line looked up with a smile, "I'll try to remeber that," Tiffiny flirted back. "How about it Madame"? Tiffiny asked.
"What are the riskes?" Sarah questioned.
"Acceptable, after all we are a research facility as well you know, and besides I think we will be fine. Besides I have confidnce in Justin here and I feal we'll be fine." Tiffiny answered.
"Very well then, have a go. I'm going to join Conrad and Frank, let us know when your ready I'll be back then," with that Sarah walked tword the interview room where she was sure Conrad would be.
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Conrad, Sarah, and Frank waited for what seemed like hours for the phone to ring, letting them know anything about what was going on in the lab. Then a sound from the intercom that seemed to almost bring comfert to the trio. Finilly it was time to make way for the lab and find out what was found. As the three made their way to the lab they found the container sitting on the table where Sarah had found it when she first walked in, and it was now tied down. Standing back a bit was Justin and Tiffiny prepairing the laser drill to peirce a small hole in container.
"What you doing over there Justin? Looks like your doing the scientist thing over there." Frank taunted.
"Nah, somone had to show theise egg heads how to work a drill, and since you weren't here I though someone aunt to," Justin tried to counter. After saying this he gave a Tiffiny a look as to say he was sorry. Tiffiny only looked away as to work on the drill. It hurt Justin to say what he said to Frank, but he had to fit in and there was no way around it. He had seen what happonds when you try to be "smart" and he would never go through that, not since this was his new start, his clean slate and he would not make himself find another second chance. If Tiffiny could not understand this then there was nothing he could do for her, though he hoped he would have a chance to explain.
"Ok, only a few more minor adjustment and we're done here. Hey, Tiffiny can you help me here?" Justin asked.
"Are you sure? I mean I would not want to get dirty. Might get my egghead dirty and all that," Tiffiny snapped still angury with Justin for his instant stupidy. Justin was a engima to her. She know he was smart and she knew he would make a nice lab tech, but for some reason he seemed content with just being a ordinary miner, nothing more. How could a man be so scared to be different? This of course came off forguin to Tiffiny as she was always the different one in thhe crowd. Growing up she was the smart one, the geek. As she grew older she not only became increasenly smart her beauty started to grow as well. This did little to help her with men as she often overwhelmed by her intelligence, and she would not become the ditizy blonde just for a man, or anyone for that matter.
"Come on don't be like that. You know what I ment and besides once this is done we can see what's inside the moon artifact," Justin pleaded.
"Fine, but lets get ths over with," Tiffiny replied.
With that both Justin and Tiffiny aimed the laser drill to peirce the small hole close to the top of the alien container to lessen the risk of hitting the object inside. As they do this Frank, Sarah, and Conrad walk to the blast room. Following them close by was Justin and Tiffiny with the remote in their hand ready to shoot the laser. Excitement mounted up as the button was pushed and the laser hit the top of the container, and the smoke rose from the laser as it begain to peirce the metal. Just as the metal reached the inside of the container something unexpected happond. All of a sudden the laser drill backfired and exploded. The drill was not the only thing to explode, as the container exploded a wave of energy was released. As all this happond the lights within the room fadded out and the room was utterly destroyed.
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